Here’s an exercise in line by line editing. What needs to be capitalized? Where should paragraphs start? What words need changing?

Lots of effort here, but what needs to be done to make it better? One recurrent grammar problem is that identifying info after a name – Joe Shmoe, who took part in the drive, said – needs two commas. But look at the bigger issues.

This article stands out for its interviewing effort, but sports articles can’t rely on cliches, as this one does in the lead. How would you rewrite the lead? What else needs to be done?

What does this article need in order to be better?

This is a press release trying to masquerade as news. But if this were a news article, what would be wrong with it?

What lessons can be learned from this article? There are basic style guide errors, but look for the bigger issues.